Write That Dialogue!

Task Description: Today I did Write that dialogue! with feeling...I had to right this dialogue with emotion . it was amazing, writing and explain with emotion.I would have wrote this more then 2 times in my blog but I was not introduce by this writing?.

My Statistical Investigation

 

 Task Description : So today we basically did a Statistical Investigation. A Statistical Investigation  is when I answer people and I ask them question to .This was a great task because now I know how to answer answers probably. 

Making Connections

WALT: make connections with the text as you read.

Task Description: There is no Walt but I can explain so basic I'm making connection to Mitchell    ,Because hes already been to camp and me myself to have been to camp. Up there you can see the things I did and what he did but I did not get hit by a tree.

Year 5/6 Camp - Writing

WALT: write in paragraphs.

Year 5/6 Camp - Writing


WALT: write in paragraphs. Reminder don’t talk Rae Jae, You need a simple sentence a complex and a quality



Introduction


Hook the reader in, and let them know what your writing is going to be about.



Last week me and team four went on camp. I was confused at first because I did not go to camp last year because my trip. Did you ever go to camp?



Paragraph 1


What is camp? Who, When, Where, Why. All the information. What activities did you do? Where do you sleep? How long is the camp etc...



Camp is very fun for everyone. We had lots of helpers, They started camp last week. We camped at Pt England school. I slept at my tent in my sleeping bag. I went because of i told i never went last year. I did Kayaking,Killer zone,Cyclo Ball,Slip and Slide,Concert Night/ Practice,Movie night - Small Foot,Hall Activities:Skateboarding,Scooters,Ramps,Ping pong/ Table tennis,Trampoline/ Flip mat and Jump Jam.


Paragraph 2


Highlight One - What was one of your highlights?


E.g. Activity, Food, Tenting, Pools, Concert



When we went kayaking I got in a double with Kauri. After that, when we were at the green pole at the deep end we nearly fell of. Then we rolled back because Mr Burt said with the loudspeaker.

Paragraph 3

Highlight One - What was one of your highlights?


E.g. Activity, Food, Tenting, Pools, Concert



On friday I went to the pools with team 4. I was very excited. I loved it but the water was really cold.



Paragraph 4


Thank you’s. Who made this happen for you? I.e. Family, School, Parent Helpers, Teachers, and Leaders etc



This is the people the made this happen:Camp Leaders,Mr Somerville, Miss Timmi, Jean, Miss West,Mose,Miss Sio,Miss Tuiā,Miss Parrant.Whaia Pania,Mr J,Mr Burt and more people thanks to all does people I and team four got to go to camp and you got to read this fantasatic recount.



Conclusion


What did you learn about yourself on camp, why would you recommend that every student does this in future.



I learnt that I hate waking up early. Ok that's not the thing I learnt that I love going to camp YOU SHOULD COME IF YOU HAVE A SCHOOL CAMP IT'S A-MAZING get it were in a maze? Wait am I the only one innnn aaaaa MAZE!.







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Last week me and team four went on camp. I was confused at first because I did not go to camp last year because my trip. Did you ever go to camp?







Camp is very fun for everyone. We had lots of helpers, They started camp last week. We camped at Pt England school. I slept at my tent in my sleeping bag. I went because of i told i never went last year. I did Kayaking,Killer zone,Cyclo Ball,Slip and Slide,Concert Night/ Practice,Movie night - Small Foot,Hall Activities:Skateboarding,Scooters,Ramps,Ping pong/ Table tennis,Trampoline/ Flip mat and Jump Jam.


When we went kayaking I got in a double with Kauri. After that, when we were at the green pole at the deep end we nearly fell of. Then we rolled back because Mr Burt said with the loudspeaker.


On Friday I went to the pools with team 4. I was very excited. I loved it but the water was really cold.  There were cool stuff like a fountain and others that I don't know how to explain



This is the people the made this happen:Camp Leaders,Mr Somerville, Miss Timmi, Jean, Miss West,Mose,Miss Sio,Miss Tuiā,Miss Parrant. Whaia Pania,Mr J,Mr Burt and more people thanks to all does people I and team four got to go to camp and you got to read this fantasatic recount.


I learnt that I hate waking up early. Ok that's not the thing I learnt that I love going to camp YOU SHOULD COME IF YOU HAVE A SCHOOL CAMP IT'S A-MAZING get it were in a maze? Wait am I the only one innnn aaaaa MAZE!. Fine out after this ad break wait you're reading not watch Ammm BYE!

Task Description:This is camp I loved it if you have a school camp or a camp make sure you go there you might learn somethings a lot of thing or anything go if you can go!
 

Pass The Story V1

Walt: Punctuate our work.

Original  Version

Once upon a time a gingerbread man got created. He was cool had chocolate glasses. One they he saw someone trying to steal his glasses. So he ran as fast as he could to get them back. He sadly stopped trying. He took his lollie phone out and called the 0911 and he was running crazy man. He WAS AN animal he is so crazy just like,

1,0000000000000000000 times! He said help! help! help! help help help. And The gingerbread man was running. His leg broke down and he had to use dog poop to make his leg work also he was hungry so ate the dog 

poo to. And he said it was so so so so yummy mhhhh he said. So he started to run again but he needed to go to the toilet but there was no around. So he went toilet and pooped and peed  on the ground in front of all the people. 

They were all looking at him with a weird looking like he was a hippo wearing a dress but they weren't looking at him they were looking at the dog behind him. The dog tried to eat him 

but failed because he ran away and just disappeared. No one ever found him until they did. They found him in the bakery he was scared to death because he hasn’t seen people in 5 years. He was terrified but then he got to know them and he was living  like he was a human. Everyone was so nice to him and he became part of the human world.

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Once upon a time a Gingerbread Man got created. He was cool had chocolate glasses. One day he saw someone trying to steal his glasses. So he ran as fast as he could to get them back. He sadly stopped trying. He took his lollie phone out and called the 0911 and he was running like a crazy gingerbread man. He was an wild animal he was so crazy.

 He said help 1,0000,000 times! He said help! help! help! . The Gingerbread Man was running. His leg broke down and he had to use dog poop to make his leg work also he was hungry so ate the dog poo to. He said it was so so so so yummy “Mhhhh” he said. So he started to run again but he needed to go to the toilet but there was no around. So he went toilet and pooped chocolate and peed coke on the ground in front of all the people. 

They were all looking at him with a weird looking like he was a Hippo wearing a dress but they weren't looking at him they were looking at the dog behind him. The Dog tried to eat him 

but failed because he ran away and just disappeared. No one ever found him until they did. They found him in the bakery he was scared to death because he hasn’t seen people in 5 years. He was terrified but then he got to know them and he was living like he was a human. Everyone was so nice to him and he became part of the human world.

Task Description : We played a game called 'Pass the Story' . We would write a little bit of the story, and then pass then pass it to the person next to us. They would then continue on the story. After the story was finished, we edited it to make sure it was punctuated properly