Write like Paul

WALT: write using the structure of a narrative.

It Begins

In the year 3177, the end of the world began. Giant Earth,Massive waves and the most terrifying creatures “Stawmerrys” ( totally not made up) yes you heard me right Stawmerrys. Creatures that are very terrifying.





People were screaming “AHHHHHH” “RUN” he didn’t know what to do I was only a 1009 year old and in the year 3177 people could live up to 1M years. he


was hiding with my family and friends with there own family to in the bunker.



He always got bored. The government sended sweet bombs but it didn’t work. So they could only do one thing ‘EAT THE STAWMERRYS!’ ‘NOW MAKE A ROBOT A GIANT ONE’ He said in strip and scaring voice” So he built a giant robot to eat the Stawmerrys .



‘wait the earth its breaking now put the so much glue in it will stink’ said the government. ‘Wow never thought it would stink’ ‘I’d like to help but i’m helping other planets sorry. ‘ Did I survive DID I REALLY SURVIVE THAT WOW!’ ‘what is that IS THAT SOME SORT OF A BOSS!?’

Is it a strawberry or a stawmerry 

The government says ‘we need help from other governments’ ‘Ok’ said Sir Rae Jae,.


So Sir Rae Jae called “Great Bradley, Super Kauri and Mr Siaku and he needed a agent so he called “agent Mohammed” ‘ok now let's go and eat them’ .

‘OH NO ITS SO BIG’ and so they all had to give the Stawmerrys fruits and vegetables. ‘Wait’ this super smart guy called Rae Jae said.

‘I'LL JUST secretly paint this meat in to a sort of new fruit’ Said Rae Jae. Then he told the government's . And if I didn’t tell you they became slaves now onto the story. Now I sal tell you.


“They glue the earth back to normal and ate'em strawberries. They ate and ate but they were full. So the people that were hungry which were 3M people ate them. They ate and ate till there was one more left but it was There boss .

‘The robot eat it!’ said Sir Rae Jae. They ate it and they were back to normal fixed.

The Mission recount

WALT: Structure a recount correctly




Today at school, our crazy teacher treated us like we were in the army. Who also has a crazy teacher like us? . So he told us to go outside, So we went out side. after that when we were all outside, He took a deep breath and said something very loud, but I forgot.



He told us to march we were beside the pav he told us how treible we did. Some people were stomping their feet ‘BOOM BAM!” I did not know what my super crazy teacher was gonna do next can you guess?.



Then We tried to sneak past very quiet . We kinda did well!. We were trying our best well I though . We walked along the deck and it was hilarious!. People were talking like this “SIR YOU GOOD” I heard some say. . We were very curious to see what our mad man was gonna do next. At this point I was dying to see what would happen next.


The third and final thing we had to do a fitness test we had to do push-ups,sit-ups and we had to pretend to be on a plane balancing. But he tried to push a boy name “Austin” but he had good balance .I thought we were gonna runon the bike tracks. But we didn’t run around anything.




Finally we march back to class but Moui was very cringing he yelled out “SIR I'M THE CAPTAIN!” or something like that. But we marched back to class and he told us if we did not make the elite team we get brain washed and back to boring PES students again. So no one made it on the team we were back to class he said “wow it was like we went somewhere but i don’t think we did. WE did all that to make a recount yep I told you were crazy . So now you did not read this writing I brainwash you did not read this you did not go on Rae Jae’s blog. Overall this was very weird hope some day your teacher act’s like this to.

Wait, were we getting recording?!. But I saved the banana he told me to eat him so I did.😌




Task Description: This task,I'm proud of. I focused really hard for this I went backed and fixed some stuff. I'm proud! of myself! yes I realy did iT!. So this why my friend writes so much he focus maybe if you focus you can write a whole book!.